For my PB2A, I chose the scholarly academic
publication, ‘Adolescents’ perceptions about their weight and practices to lose
weight,’ written by Filiz Hisar and Ebru Toruner, which studies the perceptions
of adolescents about their body weight and practices to lose weight. This
health-related research article from the Australian Journal of Advanced Nursing
is easily recognized and categorized as a health research paper, specifically
based on its features and conventions. The understanding of these features and
conventions of this scholarly academic research paper exemplifies the high-level
educational expertise, as well as further comprehends the paper’s
operationalized main concepts.
In most scholarly articles,
especially in this health-related paper, presents rhetoric conventions that
include a title, authors, key words, abstract, introduction, method, results,
discussion, conclusion, and citations/references. Through the analysis of these
conventions we are able to determine the audience, tone, style, purpose, and
context of this paper. Written by educated health-science authors in the
Department of Nursing, their use of citations of other research articles,
various use of study methods, statistics, as well as styling their paper to be structured
with headings of the conventions, convey professionalism and expertise that
defines this as a scholarly academic paper. By this observation, we are able to
determine the targeted audience members of further health-scientist researchers,
nurses, doctors, dieticians and health-studying students. We view the context
of this paper to the increasing misperceptions from adolescents of their weight,
leading to poor health choices. The concerned and informative tone of this
paper is set out to aware individuals of the purpose of this paper– the
difference between the real weight and self perceived weight of adolescents,
and imply methods for school programs to teach body weight and form, and
methods of healthy weight loss.
This concept of adolescents’ misperceptions about
weight and practices to lose weight were operationalized through data
collection. The gathering of results consisted of distributing a
fifteen-question form individually out to 703 year 9-12 students in a high
school in the Ankara District in Turkey. The posed evaluative questions asked
students about their socio-demographic (age, gender, education), their physical
and nutritional habits, and their knowledge of health and weight. Key questions
asked, “I believe that my weight is…” with optional answers of underweight,
healthy, overweight, and obese, and whether they had previously tried to lose
weight, and if yes how they tried. Another important question included, “what
methods have you used to lose weight?” given the options of physical activity,
diet, herbal, throwing up, and medication. These chosen questions were given
before the adolescents were anthropometrically measured. The measurements of
the students’ body weight (body mass index) were taken and processed by specialized
researchers. Formal results consisted of 11% students underweight, 74% healthy
weight, 6.4% overweight, and 8.2% obese. However, the perceptions of these
students resulted in 13% who considered themselves underweight, 65% healthy,
and 20% overweight. Statistics of this
data further warns the readers about the concerns of these misperceptions.
This scholarly academic paper includes rhetoric
conventions and features, which shows the proficiency and credibility of the
research paper. The operationalized concept of this paper especially highlights
the importance of teaching students the right way of understanding body weight
and form, as well as the safe and healthy way of losing weight. This paper
advises their targeted audience of health professionals, especially nurses, to
have important roles to promote health activities, encouraging life behaviours
for weight management. With increasing demands of body image through this
generation, these researchers want to inform these adolescents and their
parents, as well as improve health professionals’ knowledge of the current
adolescents’ perceptions of weight, for overall health improvement in the
future.
First of all, this was a very interesting topic that is relevant in today's society. It surely caught my attention. You do a good job describing the audience, tone, style, purpose, and context of the paper. You also mention the conventions (title, authors, key words, abstract, introduction, method, results, discussion, conclusion, and citations/references) but do not go into further detail to describe them. What do you think is the purpose of these conventions? What do they aim at doing? Lastly, I think you do a good job answering the "so what, who cares" question when you say that this paper highlights the importance of teaching students the right way of understanding body weight and form. Overall, great job!
ReplyDeleteWhy was there an abstract? What did it do for the reader? I thought you did a good job identifying the audience and purpose of the academic paper. Also, what was in the results and discussion? why did the author include these parts of the paper? That being said, I think it was a great topic choice and there is a lot to be said about it.
ReplyDeleteThe topic of your paper was of great interest to me as well as it is very relevant to the society we live in. You went to a great length with some of your conventions to mention why they matter, I would have loved to see that with all of them! The purpose of conventions is the key to why they were included so feel free to go in depth on why an author included them, what is the value to the reader? what is lost when they are not included? Overall you wrote on a great topic and did a good job taking the pieces apart, the inclusion of the specific data was great and something that I will strive to apply to my writing as well, can't wait to read more of your writing! :)
ReplyDeleteThis is a very interesting topic to read about and it caught my interest immediately. You really took the time to understand the article so it was very comprehensive to the reader. I believe you should separate each sentence more in order to allow each idea to flow more and not have run on sentences. But I really liked how you had a lot of good ideas in your writing. You combined both analysis and details so it made it really interesting to read. I also really liked how you asked questions in the writing. It helped me understand the writing more comprehensively. Good job!
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